I can't remember if I left a comment.... there were so many stories out there, and I could only scratch the surface... but I did read your story, and at no point did I feel manipulated into an emotional response. If you had made Kowalski a tragic figure, if you had had Vecchio licking his wounds from a failed realtionship, if you'd had Fraser anything but stoic and positive, then I might have felt an angst overload, but you did none of those things. Your Kowalski was scratchy, tough, bordering on unlovable. Your Vecchio was awkward and inappropriate. Your Fraser was so quietly dignified. All of these are real characteristics showing the falability of people faced with a terrible situation. And spot on IMO.
Also, the snippets of past history and other plots thing? I often think that - I could have done so much with this throw away line or that tiny plot device, but I think this is where pace has to assert itself and keep you focussed. It pains me every time I have a sparkly idea that I have to pare down to a glancing mention, but I think it's necessary in order to bring in a fic under 100,000 words! :-)
Hi! Actually, you don't know me at all and I sloped over here from nos4a2no9's LJ. But I was just chucking in my two penneth worth! Hope you don't mind.
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Date: 2007-11-23 08:34 am (UTC)Also, the snippets of past history and other plots thing? I often think that - I could have done so much with this throw away line or that tiny plot device, but I think this is where pace has to assert itself and keep you focussed. It pains me every time I have a sparkly idea that I have to pare down to a glancing mention, but I think it's necessary in order to bring in a fic under 100,000 words! :-)
Hi! Actually, you don't know me at all and I sloped over here from